Intro to Revision Piece

Beckham Intro

The piece I chose as my revision piece was my timed write on the film Bend it Like Beckham. In our response we were asked to write about how the film defines on what it is to be an outsider and how this definition upholds or challenges your own cultural understanding of what it means to be an outsider. In my original writing I mainly discussed the circumstances in which people were put in that made them feel like an outsider and in some parts I got a little sidetracked and I did not include my own personal view on this question. To change that I added more about my views and how my own life has cultural differences and took out unnecessary information. Without adding my own experiences the paper looked more like a report. I think by adding my thoughts helped strength this paper, because when an article, essay or writing has personal experiences shared by the author it just makes that writing that much more interesting and stronger.